"Nau Mai haere mai -I am in a Year 4 and 5 class called Tuatara at Mangonui School and my teacher is Ms Lloyd
Welcome to my reflective blog. Please remember I am learning to write my ideas clearly for an audience.
I loved your picture and writing ! With onomatopoeia writing, it is good practice to put the "noise" first (it helps the reader visualize), eg., "POP !! went the bubble. I was blowing so hard that it made a loud noise". OR, "Crash, bang !! went the tree as it fell over. Arrgh I screamed in fright". I am proud of your effort - you will be teaching me more about onomatopoeia before too long. Keep up the wonderful mahi Alyssa !
I loved your picture and writing ! With onomatopoeia writing, it is good practice to put the "noise" first (it helps the reader visualize), eg., "POP !! went the bubble. I was blowing so hard that it made a loud noise". OR, "Crash, bang !! went the tree as it fell over. Arrgh I screamed in fright". I am proud of your effort - you will be teaching me more about onomatopoeia before too long. Keep up the wonderful mahi Alyssa !
ReplyDeletehi Alissa i realy liked your picture and writing
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